Stars Wars, The New Jedi Order, Dark Tide 2: Ruin, by Michael A. Stackpole is a book that didn't thrill me. While the action consistently hits all the right notes and there are a few legitimately touching character moments, I felt overall that it was compressed and rendered flat by an over-reliance on what I'm going to call "emotional exposition". I can't count the number of times I found myself uttering, "Show me Michael, stop telling me!"
Okay, so what do I mean? Wikipedia tells us that exposition used as a literary technique is the conveyance of information to the reader. What I am proposing is that in both Onslaught and Ruin, Stackpole goes to a technique of "emotional exposition", in narration but especially in dialogue, wherein we find our beloved EU characters constantly explaining themselves and their motivations for the benefit of the reader. It feels unnatural, and it makes many characters appear rather stiff.
Jacen Solo is hit hardest. The young Jedi Knight sees some action in Ruin, which is great, but it was all ruined for me by his incessant introspection. There are ways of conveying uncertainty and doubt without referencing them directly through dialogue or thought italics. Show me with his actions! Show me with observation from other characters' points of view! Or better yet, let the reader figure it out. Yeah, you heard me. I will believe in the doubt of Jacen Solo, the heroism of Corran Horn, the nobility of Gilad Pellaeon, the duplicity of Borsk Fey'lya, the disposition of the galaxy towards the Jedi, and the desperation of the galactic situation without having it referenced to me ad nauseum.
*breath*